The intro, I was not overly fond of to be honest. But I really liked what you had around 33 seconds. Your melody and harmony seem to be in different keys though. Which is why I'm thinking you also may have lowered the volume on it because it sounded slightly off. I like the rhythm around 2:10, but it's a little dry. What's important is I can see how the song fits to the story though. The ending is a little abrupt as well.
I'd recommend you focus on how to flow better in to new parts of a song and how to layer with instruments and which instruments are complimentary. We've all been where you are once believe me, you are definitely on the right track though! Keep it up!